A great start Soana. Next time I'd like you to extend your sentences to add more detail, e.g. I hear the rain pounding on the roof that is protecting us. Or I taste the hot banana muffin mum cooked that burnt my mouth because I couldn't wait to eat it. The more detail you add, the more interesting it is for the reader!
I have really enjoyed reading your poem! I love the sound of the rain, especially the pitter-patter on the roof at night and the soft tapping on my window.
If you like poetry, we have a haiku challenge that you are welcome to do. If you are interested in completing SLJ activities, you can earn points and potentially win prizes!
A great start Soana. Next time I'd like you to extend your sentences to add more detail, e.g. I hear the rain pounding on the roof that is protecting us. Or I taste the hot banana muffin mum cooked that burnt my mouth because I couldn't wait to eat it.
ReplyDeleteThe more detail you add, the more interesting it is for the reader!
Kia ora Soana,
ReplyDeleteCharlotte here from the SLJ team.
I have really enjoyed reading your poem! I love the sound of the rain, especially the pitter-patter on the roof at night and the soft tapping on my window.
If you like poetry, we have a haiku challenge that you are welcome to do. If you are interested in completing SLJ activities, you can earn points and potentially win prizes!
Check out the activities here.
Ngā mihi,
Charlotte